Kept status
The article was kept 21:56, 19 December 2007.
Premier League
Review commentary
This article has a few problems:
- The lead section says "The FA Women's Premier League, more specifically the National Division, is the Premiership's female counterpart, as most of its clubs are affiliated with Premiership and Football League sides; however, the league is semi-professional and has a much lower profile than the men's game." and "The 2007–08 Season sees the Premier League introduce a new theme song, logo, typeface for player names and numbers, and patches.", but the rest of the article does not say anything about it.
- Many sections have no references. For example, "Origins", "Competition", "Transfer records" and "Former Premier League members".
- There are some English mistakes in the article. For example: "the top 22 teams broke off the First Division and formed a new league: The FA Premier League", "In 2007, the premier league negotiated" and "emailed a warning to 101greatgoals.blogspot.com, an independent website that links to youtube videos, that forced its temporary closure"
- The "Premier League problems" section is POV and unneccesary.
- Some references, for example 2, 17 and 45 (and the one after "which has an average per-team annual revenue of over US$190 million") have formatting problems.
--Kaypoh 04:31, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
FARC commentary
- Remove The article is better now and can pass GA,
but many paragraphs still have no references and some references have formatting problems. References must always go after a comma or full stop. I think the "Managers" section should not be there or should be in the "Players" section."History" section only talks about how the Premier League was formed and needs more info about what happened in the 15 seasons. "Women's Premier League" section should be expanded. I am not sure if the POV problems with the Criticism section are all fixed. Finally, the article needs a copy-edit, especially the new paragraphs/sections. --Kaypoh (talk) 09:11, 22 November 2007 (UTC) ( amended )
- Could the review period be extended? As I was not informed of this FAR until last week I am only partway through addressing the concerns. Oldelpaso (talk) 17:49, 22 November 2007 (UTC)
- I would also ask for an extension, the status of the notifications means that some more work needs to be done. Thanks. Woodym555 (talk) 00:56, 23 November 2007 (UTC)
- Kaypoh (talk · contribs) hasn't edited since Nov. 26. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 02:34, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
Note As long as you are commited to addressing the concerns provided above this FARC will not be closed. The FARC, however, will be closed if no progress is made and no status is provided. Joelito (talk) 21:40, 26 November 2007 (UTC)
- The lead and first half of the article should be better now. Tackling what used to be the "Premier League problems" section is in progress. More to follow. Oldelpaso (talk) 20:37, 29 November 2007 (UTC)
- UPDATE, I think the whole article has now been reviewed, copyedited, and referenced where appropriate (I think). All initial problems have been fixed. Any further issues would be helpful. Thanks. Woodym555 22:35, 2 December 2007 (UTC)
- Can you all put the External links last per WP:GTL? Also, wondering if some of the Seealso is already in or can be incorporated into the article; ideally, See also should be minimized (see WP:GTL). Sandy Georgia (Talk) 02:31, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
- External links moved and see also section nuked. Woody (talk) 20:31, 5 December 2007 (UTC)
- There are still incorrectly formatted citations (they all need publishers, author and publication date when available, see WP:CITE/ES), I found quite a few minor MOS glitches when running through, but more importantly, there is still a lot of uncited hard data. I did some of them, but there are still many endash fixes needed on date ranges. Nice progress, but keep going. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 03:00, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
- Dead links need to be addressed. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 06:35, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
- Done. I have also done a WP:DASH sweep and fixed up the references where I can. Woody (talk) 10:47, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
- This is looking like a keep. I would suggest one change if you think it helpful: I would change the footnotes ^ a b c d e f g Played in every Premier League season and ^ a b c d e f g h i j k l m Founding member of Premier League. They aren't references/sources per se, but by using the ref tags, they end up in the References list. You might consider changing them to superscripted notes a and b, and putting them into a line at the bottom of the actual table rather than in the sources. There's a sample at Diagnosis of Asperger syndrome#Multiple sets of diagnostic criteria. Nice work ! Sandy Georgia (Talk) 16:21, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
- Implemented that. I agree with the reasoning. It was annoying me when I did the ref sweep, but couldn't see a way around it. Thanks for the suggestion! Woody (talk) 16:51, 11 December 2007 (UTC)
- Looks good; unless anyone knowledgeable on the topic has content issues, I'm a keep. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 03:03, 12 December 2007 (UTC)
- Read my "Remove" comment above. There are still content issues. --Kaypoh (talk) 04:45, 12 December 2007 (UTC)
"...with member club revenues totalling in excess of £1.4 billion." The source doesn't actually give this figure. It's repeated again in the body and should also be sourced there. (I presume it's cumulative member club revenues.)
I'm going to go over the prose myself. Lots of duplicate blue links off the top and some wordiness. Otherwise, it's keepable. The Women's League does not need greater description, as it has its own article. "...more info about what happened in the 15 seasons." Possibly, but it's not sufficient to remove status. I'd suggest coming up with a couple of sentences on article talk. Marskell (talk) 16:48, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
The article was kept 12:22, 15 December 2007.
Political integration of India
Review commentary
Fails 1c (ie., not enough refs from reliable sources, major part of the article is unsourced). Another concern is comprehensiveness - not enough detail about the Northeastern states, for example. Issues related to integration of some of the northeastern states still linger and are at the heart of some of its problems and need to be treated in more detail. Sarvagnya 08:05, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
(unindent) I'm working on it - the past week's been a bit busy at work. I'm about half-way through reworking the bit of the article dealing with the integration of the princely states. But I really have no idea what to do with the rest of the article, though. Should the article deal with Goa, Pondicherry, Sikkim, secessionism, regionalism, etc., or should it stick to dealing with the princely states? The status quo - where the article deals haphazardly with a few random aspects of these issues - isn't really something we can stick with, but which way should the article go? -- Arvind (talk) 13:21, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
Just an update, so people don't think this has gone dead - I'm very much working on the article, and I hope to post a revised version which addresses most of these concerns by the end of this week. -- Arvind (talk) 12:40, 5 December 2007 (UTC)
FARC commentary
- Comment I've now made several rather substantial changes to the article. The article now deals only with the process of integration and the issues that arose therefrom - so it deals with the seccessionist movements in Kashmir, Tripura and Manipur, but not Punjab or Tamil Nadu, because the latter had nothing to do with the integration of the princely states or colonial enclaves into India. I've significantly expanded on the article's description of the integration process, because it was brief to the point of being misleading (for example, the privy purses had nothing to do with the initial instrument of accession as the article used to claim - they were provided as compensation for merger and the loss of princely prerogative). This's increased the size considerably, but I think this is necessary to address the issue of comprehensiveness, and at approximately 8500 words, it's still within the guidelines of WP:SS. I've also added a section on modern critical perspectives, which strikes me as being essential for encyclopaedic coverage. I believe this should address all issues raised thus far and should ensure that the article is kept, but I'd like to hear other views. Also, assistance with proofreading and polishing up the language would be welcome. -- Arvind (talk) 23:28, 9 December 2007 (UTC)
- Fixes needed .
Alm
Wenger Womens Compu-Case | Promotional Computer Bag ...
Wenger Womens Compu-Case promotional product details. Buy online or request a custom quote. Comparison shop and customize promotional computer bags in an easy step-by-step process.
Wenger Granada - Computer Cases & Bags - Compare Prices ...
Wenger Granada - 3 results like the Wenger Swissgear Granada 17" Notebook Carrying Case, Stephen Gould Wenger Granada Rolling Case - Black, WENGER Black 17' Granada Rolling Case ...
Wenger Bags & Computer Cases, Wenger Technology ...
Yukon 17" Laptop Case, Patriot 15.4" Wheeled Business Case, Patriot 15.4" Rolling Business Case
Swiss Army Laptop Backpacks and Bags by Wenger ...
Wenger ® Maker of the Genuine Swiss Army Knife™ Single Gusset Computer Bag: black; poly; fits most 17" notebooks; protective compartment; zip ...
Wenger Executive Leather Deluxe Rolling Computer-Case ...
Wenger Executive Leather Deluxe Rolling Computer-Case promotional product details. Buy online or request a custom quote. Comparison shop and customize promotional computer bags in ...
Wenger Coral Double Gusset Laptop Bag
Wenger Coral Double Gusset Laptop Bag. Click here to see more image views ... Amica Impulse Leather Computer Bag, AM143 WAS: £70.00 NOW: £35.00 SAVE 50%
Amazon.com: Customer Reviews: IMPULSE from Wenger ...
So, the Wenger bags looked great and we bought this particular bag. It's very ... IMPULSE from Wenger Single Gusset Computer Bag by Wenger
IMPULSE from Wenger Single Gusset Computer Bag User ...
IMPULSE from Wenger Single Gusset Computer Bag, Computer Accessories, Computers Videopinions are product reviews and demonstrations by the people who use them - in full motion video
Amazon.com: SATURN SwissGear by Wenger Computer ...
This item: SATURN SwissGear by Wenger Computer Messenger Bag . In Stock. Ships from and sold by J&R Music and Computer World. $8.67 shipping. Star Trek (Three-Disc Edition) [Blu-ray] ...
Wenger Swiss Gear Epoch Laptop Computer Case
Click to view larger image: GA748314(2)_.jpg. Wenger Swiss Gear Epoch Laptop Computer Case; Padded Laptop Computer Pocket Fits Most 15"/15.4" Widescreens