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Pussycat Dolls discography
I've listed this article for peer review because i have been working on improving its quality, sourcing, formatting, prose etc and would like some ideas and opinions of how to improve the article further!
Thanks, :) Mister sparky (talk) 18:35, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
(Peer review added on Saturday 28 November 2009, 18:35 UTC)
Supernatural (season 2)
I've listed this article for peer review because I was told that the prose needs improving. I think that once the writing style has been improved, the article meets the standards for FA. Thus, I would like help in copy-editing the entire article.
Thanks, Ω pho is 14:20, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
Comments from Peregrine Fisher
Well, like S1, it has some passive "ing" words going on. There are a number of "having"s and "being"s that could be worded more directly. Also, a few "becoming"s.
There are too many "was"s.
I'm not a great writer myself, but I think this article has a problem with weak verbs. Here's an article on them: Eliminate Weak Verbs Once & For All. I guess "is", "are", and "were" are (ha! I used "are" and don't know how to get rid of it) the worst.
I searched the page for some of the words I'm mentioning, and there are probably a couple hundred of them. That page I linked to says don't replace them all, but replace most of them. Kind of a hassle, I know.
It would be nice to have something to orient the reader a bit better than "After the car wreck, the Winchesters are taken to a hospital in Memphis." And something that ends it better than "Knowing that they now have to face an army of demons, Sam promises to try and free Dean from his deal." Maybe just "The season opens with..." or something.
The word "season" is used repetitively. Replace some instances with the word "it", and you'll probably need to think of a third word that can be substituted in if you can. Maybe "that year" or something. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 17:12, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
(redent) That's what I would do. If someone at FAC is desperate to put it back, then fine. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 01:01, 30 November 2009 (UTC)
It seems awkward to me, but I can't think of a better way to word it. Ω pho is 01:01, 1 December 2009 (UTC)
(redent) Sounds good. So twin A made twin B think twin B was retarded? If so, done. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 02:19, 1 December 2009 (UTC)
(Peer review added on Saturday 28 November 2009, 14:20 UTC)
Family Guy
I've listed this article for peer review because…I think it has FA potencial
Thanks, Pedro J. the rookie 22:14, 26 November 2009 (UTC)
(Peer review added on Thursday 26 November 2009, 22:14 UTC)
Ip Man (film)
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to solicit feedback about the article and how it meets featured article criteria.
Thanks, FrankRizzo2006 (talk) 06:04, 23 November 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments : This is well-written in places, less so in others. Its most glaring problems lie with the sourcing, and these would prevent it from succeeding at GAN, let alone FAC. It has potential, though, and the work you've put into it clearly shows. Here are my suggestions for improvement.
- The image needs alt text, meant for readers who can't see the images. WP:ALT has details.
- Reference numbers should be snug against the end punctuation rather than one space over as in citation 1 in the lead.
- Many of the citations are incomplete or malformed. Citations to web-based sources need the author, title, publisher, date of publication, url, and accessdate, if all of those can be found. A handy way to do citations is to use the "cite" family of templates found at WP:CIT. If you use these, don't mix them with other families of citation templates such as the "citation" family found also at WP:CIT. You also can look at other film articles, especially FA articles, in edit mode to see how other editors have handled citations.
- At least some of your sources are probably not reliable as defined by WP:RS. Blogs, for example, are not reliable sources, and dot-coms are often questionable.
Plot
- "Ip accepts work as a coolie at a coal mine." - Wikilink coolie?
Pre-production
- "Producer Raymond Wong stated that the film would take on a similar look and feel to SPL ." - Is SPL a film title? If so, this might be a little more clear as "the film SPL ". Oh, I see further down that it's SPL: Sha Po Lang. It should be spelled out and linked on this first instance rather than later.
- Generally, it's best to avoid extremely short paragraphs and sections. The two most common solutions are to expand or merge. The last paragraph in this section is quite short; the Music section is extremely short.
Filming
- "since Foshan, in early republican years" - You might add a bit more here to include outsiders in the meaning of "early republican years".
- "unique place where Chinese and Western cultures would converge" - "Converged" rather than "would converge"?
Stunts and choreography
- "Yen also had a masseur on set... " Wikilink masseur?
- "after receiving four blows continuously" - Perhaps "after receiving four consecutive blows"?
Film title controversy
- "Ip Man gained controversy over its original film title, which was disputed by film director Wong Kar-wai... " - I'm not sure "gain" is the right verb. Perhaps "Ip Man's original title was controversial. It was disputed... ".
- "To settle the dispute, Raymond Wong publicly expressed the film title... " - "Changed" or "retracted" rather than "expressed"?
- The Manual of Style deprecates fancy quotes. Blockquotes are customary for quotations of four lines or more. WP:MOSQUOTE has details.
Release
- "Ip Man was first released in China on the week of 8 December to 14 December." - Should this include the year as well?
- "The film was also released in New Zealand, and was the first country to release the Cantonese version due to time zone differences." - Ambiguous. What do time zones have to do with it? Needs clarification.
Reception
- "Prior to its theatrical release in China, Ip Man held a test screening in Beijing on 4 December 2008." - The film didn't hold a screening for itself. Who did?
- "As a traditional martial arts film, Ip Man's fight scenes were awarded... " - Dangling modifier. The fight scenes can't be equated with the film.
- "Kevin Ma of Love HK Film.com gave the film a mixed review... " - The embedded external link should be turned into an inline citation.
Home video releases
- Wikiliink trailer?
Sequels
- Ip Man 2 sees Donnie Yen reprising the lead role... " - Since films can't see, perhaps "Donnie Yen reprises his lead role in Ip Man 2, the second featured film based on the life of Ip Man"?
- "The film will focus on Ip's migration in Hong Kong... " - "migration to Hong Kong" or "movements in Hong Kong"?
- "A screenplay for a future third installment is currently being written." - I'd suggest merging this short paragraph with the one above it.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 23:05, 30 November 2009 (UTC)
(Peer review added on Tuesday 24 November 2009, 12:51 UTC)
Cathedral of Toledo
I've listed this article for peer review because it is a translated version of the Featured Article in the Spanish article. It is very detailled (about 90 kBytes big). I need critical eyes before submitting for GA nomination.
Thanks, Alberto Fernandez Fernandez (talk) 13:01, 23 November 2009 (UTC)
Comment You will need more inline citations in order to meet GA. You obviously have references in the reference section but do not cite page numbers etc. So that is one thing I can tell you right off the bat. This is obviously a labour of love so supplying the citations shouldn't be a problem and will strengthen the article immensely.Hope that helps.--Anothroskon (talk) 11:51, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
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